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13 hrs agoLiked by Marjie Alonso

What fun! I throughly enjoyed your story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

All these prompts are giving me the urge to do some writing too… maybe next year when I’m not teaching.

Inevitably, I am wondering what you’d come up with if you took the judge’s advice.

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Oh I hope you do write! Yes, I think their advice is good, and I am not, yet. It’s a fun learning curve.

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Sep 18Liked by Marjie Alonso

That was fabulous, Marjie! I could visualize the scene and your response to the situation. The comments from the the judges were good except for the comments on your last line.......Your last line was perfect - anything more would have been too wordy!!! Bravo, Marjie!!!!!!

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Thanks - I'm learning as I go, that's for sure!

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Sep 17Liked by Marjie Alonso

omg that story! Not only was it so good on its own, but it rang true to so many of our experiences going into clients' homes and finding: who knows what! I thought the judges' comments were pretty good too -

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They were!

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Sep 17Liked by Marjie Alonso

And a new word for me. Eupeptic. I will have to digest this one before I use it in a sentence.

I definitely had a grin as I read this one. I did know a Zeus who would monopolize benches in Union Square. He was one hell of a dog

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Well he would be, with a name like that!

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Sep 17Liked by Marjie Alonso

Well, he was a mastiff. The owner 's next dog, a Bernese was also very large but not quite as dominating a presence.

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Good for you, Marjie! I really admire your gumption and courage to enter these contests and then share the results. Nice work on the story. Your humor and wacky way of looking at things came through. And I love Mastifs. I can imagine that this or something like it probably happened to you.....

Looking forward to more.

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